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Song of the Wraith

Unread postby Ururam Tururam » 06 Jan 2006, 17:51

Not to let the fantastic translations by theLuckyDragon I copy-paste them here to this topic.

The map Song of the Wraith is under construction. You can see the minimap here:
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The trailing poem follows:
Silent is his heart, and stilled in his frozen chest.
Sealed are his lips with the silence of death, as his eyes.
He lingers in this world and he cannot find his rest.
Who is he? The dead one that shall rise.

Silently his frozen chest once more draws breath
And his eyes and mouth are sealed no longer.
Back in the world, but nor in life, nor in death,
Who is he? A restless wraith of yore.
And here is the dead one that shall rise:

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And the storyline poem follows:
I chant in my tomb, in darkness cold,
And smell the blood of foes; from the grave
I rise and haunt -- restless wraith of old
I am and their blood, blood, blood I crave!

Swift and painful revenge on the foe:
With or without God, my revenge they'll know!

And so I chant: at nightfall I'll go,
My brothers, my kin I will wake
From their sleep, and I'll bite of their soul
And wraiths just like me I will make!

Swift and painful revenge on the foe:
With or without God, my revenge they'll know!

Then on the foe's blood we will go and feast
With sword and axe we will wreck his shape
And nail him in pain until his heart hath ceased
As a wraith like us he shall not escape!

Swift and painful revenge on the foe:
With or without God, my revenge they'll know!

And in darkest hell his soul we'll lock away
With hate and with malice we'll press on his tomb;
Until his last hope hath died in dismay
And the fear of our fangs upon him shall loom!

Swift and painful revenge on the foe:
With or without God, my revenge they'll know!
Hoc est opus!
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Unread postby theLuckyDragon » 06 Jan 2006, 18:00

Thank you very much for the appreciation! :D

But it would have been much more difficult without feedback from you and a little inspiration from your's and wimfrits' tries.
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Unread postby Thelonious » 07 Jan 2006, 15:16

Cool mini-map and nice poem!
Grah!

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Unread postby Ururam Tururam » 09 Jan 2006, 23:43

Let us hope that the map itself will be good too!
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Unread postby ScarlettP » 10 Jan 2006, 23:19

Nice Work Lucky!

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Unread postby Ururam Tururam » 17 Jan 2006, 16:31

The map goes Alpha...
That means it will go Beta in a few days. ;)

The only thing I don't like is an amount of translation to do when the beta phase is almost over. Well, I have to - thus I will do it.

And as usual for my story-reach maps I'm looking for a native English speaker to do some proofreading and polishing!
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Unread postby theLuckyDragon » 27 Jan 2006, 14:12

Today at Romanian class we studied a poem called "The Holm-oak", which combines the themes of nature and death, and I instantly thought of your map. The original had no rhyme or rhythm, so it was fairly easy to translate into English:

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The Holm-oak (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Holm_oak)
by Lucian Blaga (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lucian_Blaga)

In the clear horizon I hear from a tower's chest
how a bell rings with the sound of a heart
and silently and sweetly
it seems to me
that drops of silence flow through my veins, not blood.

Holm-oak from the edge of the forest,
why does so much peace
overwhelm me with tender wings
as I linger in your shadow
and you caress me with thy playful leaf?

Oh, who knows? -- Maybe
your trunk shall soon be sculpted
into my coffin,
and maybe the silence
that I shall taste between its boards
is what I feel now:
I feel it as your leaf drips it into my soul --
and in silence
I listen as inside your trunk my coffin grows,
my coffin,
with every passing moment,
holm-oak from the edge of the forest.
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Unread postby ScarlettP » 28 Jan 2006, 12:15

THAT poem could be a good inspiration for a map as well.

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Unread postby theLuckyDragon » 28 Jan 2006, 12:17

Lots of literature can be turned into maps... but who has the time? :sigh:
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Unread postby ScarlettP » 28 Jan 2006, 13:12

Not I! *giggle*

*sigh* back to working on Season of War. It's SO CLOSE to being finished! Sad part is that none of the new people are going to know who some of the people in the map ARE... like GhostWriter, Lord Haart, Vaudy and White Tiger.

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Unread postby theLuckyDragon » 28 Jan 2006, 13:30

I remember Lord Haart... Wasn't he the one who poisoned Catherine's father, then got resurrected as a lich and ravaged Tatalia, only to be vanquished by Adrienne?

No, seriously, I remeber him from the Old Round Table. And GhostWriter and Vaudy too, but they're a little blurry.
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Unread postby Gaidal Cain » 28 Jan 2006, 22:02

ScarlettP wrote:Sad part is that none of the new people are going to know who some of the people in the map ARE... like GhostWriter, Lord Haart, Vaudy and White Tiger.
Darned youngsters! No stamina! Back in my days, the heroes players were made of sterner stuff! :|
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Unread postby Ururam Tururam » 28 Jan 2006, 22:41

ScarlettP wrote:THAT poem could be a good inspiration for a map as well.
I fully agree!
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Unread postby theLuckyDragon » 01 Feb 2006, 22:17

So UT, how's the map going?
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Unread postby Thelonious » 02 Feb 2006, 15:15

ScarlettP wrote:Not I! *giggle*

*sigh* back to working on Season of War. It's SO CLOSE to being finished! Sad part is that none of the new people are going to know who some of the people in the map ARE... like GhostWriter, Lord Haart, Vaudy and White Tiger.
I do know them... Feeling very very old right now :hoo:
Grah!

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Unread postby DaemianLucifer » 02 Feb 2006, 15:25

Thelonious wrote:
ScarlettP wrote:Not I! *giggle*

*sigh* back to working on Season of War. It's SO CLOSE to being finished! Sad part is that none of the new people are going to know who some of the people in the map ARE... like GhostWriter, Lord Haart, Vaudy and White Tiger.
I do know them... Feeling very very old right now :hoo:
But you look so young in that picture.What are you using to cover your age? :devil:

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Unread postby Thelonious » 02 Feb 2006, 18:32

I put my brains in that of a youthly mouse trying to take over the world! :devil: :devil: :devil:
Grah!

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Unread postby Ururam Tururam » 09 Feb 2006, 10:44

Heh, betatests are almost finished.

Now I'm to translate the story. Uhhh, this will hurt!
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Unread postby theLuckyDragon » 09 Feb 2006, 11:02

Ururam Tururam wrote:Heh, betatests are almost finished.

Now I'm to translate the story. Uhhh, this will hurt!
If you want someone to help with proofreading... I'm here. :)
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Unread postby ScarlettP » 09 Feb 2006, 13:56

Ditto. My spelling SUCKS, but my grammar is excellent. Besides, I have Word Pro - it checks EVERYTHING.


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